Cassandra Thomas
Come on, come on, Keisha and Saniyah let’s go! My sister and I rushed and grabbed our luggage excitedly when we heard our mother call because we knew that it was finally time to go. When Keisha and I got outside I could not help but feel like I had for got something. That’s when it hit me, and I thought to my self, Spike. Spike is the name of my dog. He is not that big nor is he that small. He is all brown and has pretty brown eyes. Spike is very friendly and happens to be my best friend. Which is why I felt the need to bring him on all of our family vacations. Now normally my parents would not allow me to bring Spike on any family vacations, but this time I refused to let them say no, so I begged and pleaded until they finally gave in. When I returned back outside with spike in my hands I noticed that my parents had already put the luggage in the car and were just waiting on me. I got in the car full of excitement because I enjoy going on family trips. This trip was a little different from the rest because this time we were going camping. Which my parents say is more like a trip than a vacation. That is probably why they allowed Spike to come this time. The ride to where ever we were going was a bit long, but not as long as our vacations. When we finally arrived there my family and I immediately began to put up our sleeping tents. My parents shared a tent while Keisha, Spike, and I shared a tent. We were all pretty much exhausted from the drive so after putting out tents up we decided to go to sleep and wake up early tomorrow to begin our first camping adventure together. The next morning we woke up at eight o’ clock and made something to eat. Making something to eat where we were at was different because everything we made to eat was made by us holding it over fire; therefore there was not a variety of things for us to eat. After eating I decided to take Spike for a little walk, but I was so busy looking around and talking to Spike that I did not realize that I walked a little further then planned. I looked back and noticed that I did not realize where I was. When I looked ahead two large lions and a huge black bear greeted me. My heart dropped to my feet when I noticed the vicious animals. The black bear was the first to start his attack. He looked at me with his devious eyes, “what are you doing in our turf?” With my hands trembling I replied I was just walking my dog, I did not mean any harm. The two loins answered in unison “ well offense token”. The animals began to close in on me. That’s when Spike hopped out my arms and jumped to my defense. He took his first claw at the bear and from there on I knew that the worst was about to take place. I knew that my and little Spike could not take the three vicious animals. When the bear clawed back at Spike I knew that my assumption was correct. I looked over and saw a huge tree branch. I ran over a got the tree branch so that I could use it against the two lions. I began swing the tree branch as quick as I can considering all the weight on the branch. Suddenly I realized that Spike and I were not fighting alone. I looked and saw Keisha and my two parents swinging there own little weapons that they must have found. My father helped me fight off the two lions while my mother, Keisha, and Spike fought of the bear. I noticed that the bear was down and could tell that the bear was not getting back up because he was not breathing. So Spike, Keisha, and my mother came and joined my father and I. The two lions were putting up a good fight. My mother began to choke one of the lions with all of her might forcing the lion to fall to the ground. We were all swinging our weapons with much force. You could hear our weapons hitting the lion and in matter of time we sent the lion crashing to the ground. We were exhausted after the battle. We all hugged, happy that we were all okay. I could not help but wonder how they knew where to find me so I asked. “ How did yall know where to find me”? Keisha answered because my twin senses kicked in and I knew that you were in harm. I told mommy and daddy and we rushed to save you. Thank you I replied with tear in my eyes. At that point I was very happy and for the first time I appreciated the fact that I was a twin. This family trip will be one that I will always remember. Two large tigers interrupted my thoughts. My family and I all looked at the two hungry looking tigers and almost fainted….
Wednesday, November 21, 2007
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Star-aisha Boyd
EXPOSITION
1. WHEN/WHERE DOES THIS STORY TAKE PLACE? At a camp site.
2. WHAT HAS HAPPENED BEFORE? She always wanted to take her dog Spike on a vacation with her.
CONFLICT AND CLIMAX
1. WHAT PROBLEMS DOES THE CENTRAL CHARACTER FACE? She comes across two lions and a bear.
2. WHEN DO YOU LEARN HOW THE PROBLEM IS WORKED OUT? When her and her family finish fighting the animals.
DENOUEMENT
1. HOW DOES THE STORY END? She and her family look up and see more animals.
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2. SUGGEST AN EXTRA SCENE TO STRENGTHEN THE PLOT. How the animals were fighting back, and was anyone hurt by any of the animals.
CHARACTERIZATION
1. WHO ARE THE CHARACTERS INVOLVED IN THE STORY? HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE THEIR ROLES? Her mother, her father, her twin sister, and her dog. They roles in the story are her protection.
2. DIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DOES THE AUTHOR TELL US "DIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST (MAIN CHARACTER) FROM HIS OR HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE AND PERSONALITY? She really don’t describe the protagonist, but we know that the protagonist really love her dog.
3. INDIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DO WE LEARN "INDIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT HE OR SHE SAYS (DOES)? WHAT DO WE LEARN ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT OTHERS SAY ABOUT HIM OR HER? She tells us her feeling toward the dog, but she does not give ideas about the protagonist.
4. SUGGEST AN ADDED DETAIL TO STRENGTHEN THE DESCRIPTION OF ONE MAJOR OR MINOR CHARACTER. She could describe how she looks and how some of her family members look. She could even say how her family knew to look for her because she always ran off when ever they go on vacations.
Jasmone` Townes
EXPOSiTiON
1. The story takes place in a camping site where Saniyah had her family vacation.
2. Her family goes on vacations every year and she wanted to bring her dog Spike. She almost left him behind when they were about to leave.
CONFliCT ANd CliMAX
1. The problem Saniyah faced was fighting off the bear and the two lions while she was alone walking her dog.
2. I learn how the problem is worked out when her family comes to help fight off the animals and they crashed to the ground.
dENOUEMENT
1. The story ends when she is thanking everyone for coming to her rescue. Then she hears the sound of two tigers ready to attack.
2. An extra scene to strengthen the plot would be where the campsite was and what it looked like.
CHARACTERiZATiON
1. Saniyah is the main character of the story. She has a twin named Keisha and a dog named Spike. Spike is a medium sized, brown dog. Then there is a mom and a dad. Saniyah's character is brave and thankful. Her twin, Keisha, has a sensuous character. Spike, is also a brave character. The parents weren't described that much in the story.
2. The main character isn’t really described in the story. They described the dog more than the main character.
3. I learn that the main character is a brave person. She also knows what she wants. She wanted to bring her dog on the vacation and begged her parents until they gave in. No one says anything about the protagonist.
4. They could talk about how the main character loves her dog so much and how she would do anything to protect the dog. Also how she didn’t really appreciate her twin until after the fight.
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