DEAD END
"Oh,no.Here she go again",said Amber to her best friend Lisa.Amber and Lisa were watching America's Next Top Model on a twelve inch screen in Amber's small bedroom."Why she gotta do dat?Now she know she gon get...",Amber stopped."Did you hear a door slam?",asked Amber. "No,why?",replied Lisa."Just come downstairs with me".Lisa cautiously followed her down the steps.Before Amber reached the last step, she stopped as if frozen in shock.Standing in the middle of the living room,looking through her purse was Amber's mom Danielle. Danielle turned toward Lisa and Amber with her face full of confusion."Amber,what's wrong.You look like you just seen a ghost.""It's just that...I'm kinda surprised you're home early",said Amber still hit by shock."What do you mean?",asked Danielle still confused."Well ,you usually are out till three in the morning with 'friends'".Amber and her mother knew what she meant about "friends".See,a while back Danielle has been doing speed,crack,weed and every other drug out there.She has been going out meeting up with her drug buddies and shooting, snorting,and inhaling things into her body.Now she has no job and the bills are way past due."Amber,I told you once and I'm gon tell you again.Don't worry about where I've been and what I been doing.It's none of your business.I take care of this family,not you"! Amber felt as if someone has shot a bullet through her soul."It is my business.It's not my fault you're hooked on drugs and you can't even buy food to support your family.I'm the one knocking on neighbors doors at night just ta get some cold leftovers that we have to split"!Danielle stormed across the room and smacked Amber in her face.Tears streamed down Amber's face as she looked at her mother with an angry look on her face.She turned toward the stairs and ran up towards her room while Lisa followed after her.
"Oh,no.Here she go again",said Amber to her best friend Lisa.Amber and Lisa were watching America's Next Top Model on a twelve inch screen in Amber's small bedroom."Why she gotta do dat?Now she know she gon get...",Amber stopped."Did you hear a door slam?",asked Amber. "No,why?",replied Lisa."Just come downstairs with me".Lisa cautiously followed her down the steps.Before Amber reached the last step, she stopped as if frozen in shock.Standing in the middle of the living room,looking through her purse was Amber's mom Danielle. Danielle turned toward Lisa and Amber with her face full of confusion."Amber,what's wrong.You look like you just seen a ghost.""It's just that...I'm kinda surprised you're home early",said Amber still hit by shock."What do you mean?",asked Danielle still confused."Well ,you usually are out till three in the morning with 'friends'".Amber and her mother knew what she meant about "friends".See,a while back Danielle has been doing speed,crack,weed and every other drug out there.She has been going out meeting up with her drug buddies and shooting, snorting,and inhaling things into her body.Now she has no job and the bills are way past due."Amber,I told you once and I'm gon tell you again.Don't worry about where I've been and what I been doing.It's none of your business.I take care of this family,not you"! Amber felt as if someone has shot a bullet through her soul."It is my business.It's not my fault you're hooked on drugs and you can't even buy food to support your family.I'm the one knocking on neighbors doors at night just ta get some cold leftovers that we have to split"!Danielle stormed across the room and smacked Amber in her face.Tears streamed down Amber's face as she looked at her mother with an angry look on her face.She turned toward the stairs and ran up towards her room while Lisa followed after her.
When Lisa finally caught up with her,Amber was laying face down on her pillow,crying her eyes out."Ay Amber.Why you always on ya mom case?Lately you've been starting a lot of arguments and you're always the one getting hurt",said Lisa."I don't need another critic,okay.I got enough problems as it is"."Amber,I understand that but-you are not the only one with problems.My life ain't perfect as you think it is.I have no mother, my sister's three months pregnant ,she still don't know the father ,and doesn't know whether she should keep it or not"."That's not the point.You say you understand,but you haven't been through the problems I have experienced.Maybe I shouldn't be wasting my breath right now.You'll never get it",said Amber."Maybe I'm just wasting my time trying to comfort you.I gotta get home anyway.Good luck feeling sorry for yaself and ya crackheaded mom!".Lisa grabbed her bag and slammed the door.
The next day at Charles R.Drew Elementary,in Amber's eighth grade homeroom,Amber sat in her seat quietly, isolating herself from the entire classroom."Amber may I please have a chat with you?",asked her teacher,Ms.Jones.Amber slowly got out of her seat and went towards her teacher's desk."What did I do this time Ms.Jones?",asked Amber ,sounding annoyed."Amber,I just recieved a note ,which I was told,that you will be leaving soon"."Ms.Jones,I know this is your way of getting me back.I'm sorry I cracked on you two days ago.We both know that nobody wears penny loafers anymore.And you had ta know somebody was gon say something",said Amber feeling positive that this surely was a prank."Amber,I'm serious.Just read it yourself.I think it's important".Amber walked back to her seat quickly,hoping no one she knows has died.When she finally reached her seat,she tore open the envelope as if her life depended on it.Scanning the letter,Amber face changed expressions."No!This has to be a joke"!Amber had a feeling someone close to her had something to do with the letter.But who?Amber quickly turned around towards Lisa who was in the back chatting with a couple of girls."You"!Lisa stopped talking and turned around,recognizing Amber's voice.Amber who was still looking at Lisa,repeated herself."You"!"Me what?",asked Lisa."You are the reason why I got to leave home and go stay with a bunch of strangers"!Lisa responded,"What are you talking bout?I haven't told anyone anything and why would I do a thing like that?I could never seperate a child and mother just because I got angry at them".Now the whole class was listening in on the conversation."Then who else could it be?",asked Amber."I don't know.Maybe your mom called child services herself cause she knew she needed help",said Lisa."My mom wouldn't do dat to me.Would she"? The more Amber thought about it.The sooner she found out.Her mom did call child services.
On Friday ,while Amber was packing up ,she took one more glance at the picture of her and her mom before going downstairs to say goodbye.She grabbed her last bag and met her mom near the front door.She gave her mom a hug and took the picture out of her bag."Mom-don't forget me".She hugged again and walked out to the car where a woman was waiting.When the car drove off Amber wanted to cry.But she didn't.She wanted to be strong.Strong for her and her mother.
2 comments:
EXPOSITION
1. WHEN/WHERE DOES THIS STORY TAKE PLACE?
The author doesn’t state where/when the story takes place.
2. WHAT HAS HAPPENED BEFORE?
The main character mother did drugs.
CONFLICT AND CLIMAX
1. WHAT PROBLEMS DOES THE CENTRAL CHARACTER FACE?
She faces her mom addictions to drug and having no job. She suffers from no food and having to beg for it while her mom is out doing drugs.
2. WHEN DO YOU LEARN HOW THE PROBLEM IS WORKED OUT?
The problem doesn’t work out. Her mother calls child services because she has no money to support her daughter and has no other chose.
DENOUEMENT
1. HOW DOES THE STORY END?
The story ends by the main character going into foster care because her mom couldn’t afford to raise her.
2. SUGGEST AN EXTRA SCENE TO STRENGTHEN THE PLOT.
I think she could’ve added a part about the mother’s point of view.
CHARACTERIZATION
1. WHO ARE THE CHARACTERS INVOLVED IN THE STORY? HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE THEIR ROLES?
Characters in the story are Lisa, Amber, her mom, and Amber’s teacher.
Amber is the central character. Lisa is Amber’s best friend. Amber’s mom has an addiction to drugs. Amber’s teacher plays a little simple role in the story.
2. DIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DOES THE AUTHOR TELL US "DIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST (MAIN CHARACTER) FROM HIS OR HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE AND PERSONALITY?
No direct physical appearance about the characters. Amber is independent.
3. INDIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DO WE LEARN "INDIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT HE OR SHE SAYS (DOES)? WHAT DO WE LEARN ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT OTHERS SAY ABOUT HIM OR HER?
She’s not happy. She gets frustrated real quickly and gets her into bigger problems.
4. SUGGEST AN ADDED DETAIL TO STRENGTHEN THE DESCRIPTION OF ONE MAJOR OR MINOR CHARACTER.
By adding how Lisa or Amber’s mom feel.
-Dina Pin
EXPOSITION
1. WHEN/WHERE DOES THIS STORY TAKE PLACE?
The story takes place at Amber’s house.
CONFLICT AND CLIMAX
1. WHAT PROBLEMS DOES THE CENTRAL CHARACTER FACE?
The problem was that Amber’s mom was on drugs.
2. WHEN DO YOU LEARN HOW THE PROBLEM IS WORKED OUT?
I learned after the next day when they go to school.
DENOUEMENT
1. HOW DOES THE STORY END?
The story ended by that Amber went to foster home.
2. SUGGEST AN EXTRA SCENE TO STRENGTHEN THE PLOT.
Another scene could be where Danielle is calling child services.
CHARACTERIZATION
1. WHO ARE THE CHARACTERS INVOLVED IN THE STORY?
The characters were Amber, Danielle, and Lisa.
HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE THEIR ROLES?
Amber is the main character, Lisa is her friend, and Danielle is Amber’s mom.
2. DIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DOES THE AUTHOR TELL US "DIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST (MAIN CHARACTER) FROM HIS OR HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE AND PERSONALITY?
The author told us that Amber doesn’t think that anyone knows what she is going through.
3. INDIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DO WE LEARN "INDIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT HE OR SHE SAYS (DOES)?
We learn that even though Amber’s mom is on drugs that she still loves her mom.
WHAT DO WE LEARN ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT OTHERS SAY ABOUT HIM OR HER?
That Amber is depressed.
4. SUGGEST AN ADDED DETAIL TO STRENGTHEN THE DESCRIPTION OF ONE MAJOR OR MINOR CHARACTER.
For Amber to be more open about the situation.
-Victoria Lewis-Davis
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