Monday, November 19, 2007

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Christina Jones Be Careful Who You Call Your Friends 11/16/07
I can't belive my friends gave me crak. “Good morning baby its time to get ready for school”, Laci’s mother said. As Laci got up to get ready for school she looked out her window to see the regular routine every morning. Mr. Woody her next door neighbor, was as always yelling at the bad little rugged boys to get off his property, meanwhile Ms Jhonson was cleaning the dirty neighborhood like she does every morning. “I don’t know why she always cleaning knowing it will get just get dirty all over again” she thought to herself. As Laci was on her way out the door for school her mom ran behind her and gave her a hug and a big kiss. ‘Mom why would you do that knowing I have to go to school what will the other kids think if they see me with lipgloss print on my cheek” she said walking out the door whipping her cheek off. “I don’t know why she is worried about other people and what they will think she has a life they would envy.” She thought and little did she know they did just that. See Laci stood about 5’5,135 pounds, long brown hair and a body to die for, with the brains to match, and was always looking out for people. When Laci got to school she saw her friends she seen them whispering about something, curious she went over there but seemed to be to late. Not paying any attieon to the fact that they got quiet when she walked over, she smiled at them and said “hi”they responded with a nod as they always did she was used to it by now. ‘Say lets go get some weed” Crystal asked I need some to start my day off right.All the girls agreed accept Laci she said “now you guys now I don’t smoke, besides I don’t want to be late for class. “there you go miss goody2 shoes always talking about class, I don’t know why you hang out with us you are nothing like us” Shannon. In a way they had a point Laci was collage bound and didn’t even know what struggle meant she always had everything she needed and wanted but never braged because she was taught that that was wroung while on the other hand these gurls didn’t even know what collage was not cause they couldn’t because they didn’t want to. And struggle was the girls middle name. “Its not that I just want to go to class its our last year and I want to have good grades don’t you, alright never mind I’ll go whats it gonna hurt to try some weed you only live once” Laci said. At that point the girls were smiling they all knew what was going down except her. Crystal roled up the blunt and gave it to laci to smoke, she was so excited she didn’t even realize she was the only one smoking. When they wee finshied Laci went home because she didn’t feel well little did she know it was the beginning to something much horrible. What is going on why do i feel so strange laci thought to herself. Maybe i need to go home thoughtlaci. as she was coming home she saw mr.Woody and MS.Jhonson i wonder whats wrong with her they thought. laci was so dizzy she couldnt even walk straghit she knew she was sick but her friends acted like she was alright if this is how you supposed to feel i don't want to do this again. but she couldnt help the fact that when she smoked it she felt like she was on cloud 9 and she wanted that high again. She passed out right before she got to her house. mr.woody and msjhonson rushed over to see what was wrong and msjhonson got some smelling salt and took it too her as she woke up and asked did she want to come to her house. laci didnt really want to but cause she knew all the lady wanted to do was be nosy but she couldnt say no. when they got to her house msjhonson began the questioning what was wrong with you dear you just fell right out is you on that stuff. imedditaly laci got offeded and frownd her face up hell no what you go and ask me that for i wouldnt dare try that shit realizeing that she just snapped on the old lady she imeddly felt bad and asked for her forgivenses. msjhonson repelied by saying i was only playing dear i wanted to make u smile it looks like you had a ruff day. maybe you should laydown. and that she did but all she could think about was that high she felt eariler knowing hermom was at work she lied and told msjhonson that she was going to her job she left searching for tat high she once felt. mrwoody saw her and knew something wassnt right.butt he just looked saying nothing. laci was walking and to her surpried found her self at crystals house. hey do you know where i could get some more of that stuff. crystal being crystal gave her tripple the dose she had before and laci smoked it all. crystal then gave her 5 bags to take home laci's face lit up like a christmas tree she was so happy. she praticly ran home and smoked it all with out saying thank you to crystal ungratful bitch thought crystal good girl gone bad ha well see who goes to college now. crystal laughed to her sel. Weeks passed and laci's mom began to see a chang in laci's behavior she looked a mess her grades were slipping and all she did was come home late and stayed locked in her room. she planned on confronting laci when she got home from work but little did she know she was in for a surprise Her mom came in and noticed that laci was sleeping she tapped her but she didn’t move. Paniking she called the police they came and checked her and immedenly knew what the problem was they seen that look all too many they went and explained to her mother that she was smoking crack and was obvouly a 1st time user they took her in and when laci woke up she couldn’t belive her ears crack she thought to her self my so called friends gave me crack i thought it was weed was all she could say. and thats supposed to make it better her mom said what have i told u about that now she was praticly yelling with tears in her eyes. mom i tried to stop but it just kept calling me i thought they were my friends i went from schoool president to a damn crakhead she cried.the police said it wasnt to late for her to kick the habit it was going to be hard and she knew that because all she could think about was the crack it was on her mind all day and all night she snapped out of it when they asked who gave it to her but she wouldn’t snitch because she just wouldn’t feel right. They recommended she go to a rehab center to get things stragit.it was hard every night for 5 months she would break out in the middle of the night with cold sweats she hardly wanted to eat she was always so cold and she felt so lonley like she was going to die without. but with the help of her mom who told her she could do it and mr.woodys joke4s during visting hours not only that msjhonsons browines which seemed like the only thing she could eat she made it but not with out a couple of sarfacies. She missed out on her 1st year of collage, graudation and senior prom although she recovered she never forgot all she wanted was to be in the in crowd but after what happed she realized it wasn’t worth it and being true to her self would have kept her out of trouble. Now she goes out and speaks to the youth about drugs and the pain they cause after all who better to tell her story then her. she says to any one reading “be careful who you call your friends"

2 comments:

Leo Mullen said...

Exposition: 1. Your story takes place in he city about present day time.
2. Laci got up in the morning and went to school with the same routine everyday. She hangs out with the same people everyday and she doesn't really belong with that crowd of people.

Conflic and Climax: 1. The central character Laci is given cack laced mary jane by her so called friends and she becomes a fien.
2. Just before the end of the story you tell that she goes to rehab and eventuall breaks her addiction.

Denouement: 1. The story ends with you telling us that she looks back on the situation and sees that she should have been true to herself not fake friends.
2. I think that the stories theme and plot would be more brilliant if you go into more detail about how she felt after she smoked the blunt and how she was in rehab.

Characterization: 1. The characters are Laci, her mother, Laci's friends, an old woman, and an old man. Laci is the protaganis; Laci's friends are the antaganists; and Laci's mother, the old lady and man play almost no real role but to help describe the neighborhood and people around Laci.
2. You tell about her physical appearrence and about her self-esteem.
3. We learn that Laci is a loner with absolutely no self-esteem or respect for her body and she is a follower.
4. Maybe you could tell more about why Laci is so low to herself.

Leo Mullen said...

Exposition
1.Your story takes place somewhere in the daytime and in the morning.
2. Laci wakes up in the morning getting ready for class. Likes to chill with her friends.

Conflict and Climax
1. The problem that Laci face are with her friends because she did not want to smoke with them and thinks they should not either also she wants to get out of it.
2. I learned at the end about the problem being worked out.

Denouement
1. The story ends in which laci can truly see that she does not have true friends.
2. I think if the scene had more detail it would be much better.

Characterization
1.laci is very nice and seem quiet. her mother, old woman and man
2. About her first expression, self esteem, and self consciousness
3. Laci has mad respect for her self
4.more detail about her friends and their struggle to drugs.