Randy Shuler
11/21/07
Period 6
Mr. Mullen
The Hat
There was a boy from North Philly and his
name was Paul. He loved music and his favorite rapper
was Lil Wayne. Lil Wayne throws his hat to Paul at the
concert and when he put it on he feels like the
greatest rapper alive.
“Can I go to the Lil Wayne concert with
John and Jermaine mom this is the last day he’s in
Philly?” said Paul. “Yeah, you can go but why he’s
ugly and he can’t even rap,” said Paul’s mom. “But
please mom,” said Paul “fine I still say he’s ugly and
he can’t rap, we’ll get the tickets tomorrow,” said
Paul’s mom. “YES, YES, YES thank you mom, thank you
mom, thank you mom,” said Paul.
It was the next day and Paul and his
friends got the last three tickets. After they got
their tickets they ran to the stage, they had third
row seats. “These tickets are the best,” said Jermaine
“I know were really close,” said Paul. Then all the
lights went off and everyone started screaming like
someone was trying to kill them. All you could hear
was AWWWWWWW and WEEZY. Then Lil Wayne came out
sitting on a throne then he jump up and started to
rap. The concert was hot then the last song came on,
when Lil Wayne sat back on the throne he put on a
fitted golden Washington Nationals. Paul wanted that
hat, that’s all he was looking at.” Yall see that
hat,” said Paul “WHAT,” said Jermaine “I SAID, YOU SEE
THAT HAT,” yelled Paul. “YEAH IT’S OK,” yelled
Jermaine. When the song was over Lil Wayne threw the
hat into the crowd and it landed perfectly on Paul’s
head. “Oh my god,” screamed Paul then he fainted for
the rest of the concert. When Paul woke up he thought
he was dreaming then he felt his head and the hat was
still there. “ It wasn’t a dream,” said Paul “Nope its
real, how you feel you just fainted out in the middle
of the concert ” said John “forget that, I still got
the hat,” said Paul. All the way home Paul was
bragging on how he got the hat. Paul loved that hat he
eat with his hat, sleep with his hat, he even took
showers with his hat.
It was Monday, and it was ten minutes left of
school. Paul started going on about the hat. “Lil
Wayne gave me this hat at the concert,” said Paul
“No he didn’t, stop lying,” said Maurice. Maurice
and Paul hated each other they would always
competed with each other to see who had the best
stuff. “Yes he did,” said Paul “let me see it
then,” said Maurice. As soon as Paul gave the hat
to Maurice, Maurice snatched the hat and ran.
Maurice hopped over two desks to get to the door.
“What in the world,” said Mrs. Fisher. Paul ran
after Him through the halls, “hey come back,”
said Paul. Maurice was running faster than
lighting and Maurice bust threw the front doors
and then Paul gave up and just looked up at the
sky like he wanted to scream his head off. “Not my
hat,” said Paul. Paul never saw Maurice again he
must of transfered schools because we never saw
him again. Paul never been the same after that day
he lost his favorite hat.
Wednesday, November 21, 2007
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2 comments:
Exposition
1. The story took place at a concert in North Philadelphia.
Conflict and Climax
1. The problem that the central character had to face was that his hat was stolen by Maurice and that hat meant a lot to him because it was Lil Wayne’s hat.
2. The problem doesn’t really seem to work out the boy just has to face that his hat was stolen.
Denouement
1. The story ends with Paul being upset, and he has to accept he won’t get the hat back from Maurice because ever since that day Maurice took the hat no one has seen him since.
2. I think that if Randy uses more details of how upset Paul was and showing that Maurice teasing Paul would have a better picture for the story.
Characterization
1. Characters involved in the story are Paul, Maurice, John, Jermaine, Paul’s mom, Lil wayne, and Mrs. Fisher.
Paul was a kid who had a passion for music and loved little Wayne for his work. Maurice was a stealer. John and Jermaine didn’t really seem to have much characteristics to them but they were John friends. Paul’s mom was understanding to know that he wanted to see little Wayne even though her opinion was why would he want to see a ugly rapper. Finally, Mrs. Fisher was just a teacher like any other wondering why are the kid’s acting up.
2. Paul’s protagonist was with how he lost that hat and he was highly upset because it was from his favorite rapper.
3. Doesn’t really provide an answer for this question.
4. I think Randy should use more details of imagine and use more drama to create for drawn attention.
Kelly Nguyen
6th period
EXPOSITION
1. WHEN/WHERE DOES THIS STORY TAKE PLACE?
North Philly
CONFLICT AND CLIMAX
1. WHAT PROBLEMS DOES THE CENTRAL CHARACTER FACE?
Maurice stole his hat
2. WHEN DO YOU LEARN HOW THE PROBLEM IS WORKED OUT?
It’s never resolved
DENOUEMENT
1. HOW DOES THE STORY END?
His hat gets stolen
2. SUGGEST AN EXTRA SCENE TO STRENGTHEN THE PLOT.
Him and Maurice Fighting for the hat
CHARACTERIZATION
1. WHO ARE THE CHARACTERS INVOLVED IN THE STORY? HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE THEIR ROLES?
Paul-Main Character, Jermaine-Best Friend, John-Best friend, Maurice-Rival
2. DIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DOES THE AUTHOR TELL US "DIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST (MAIN CHARACTER) FROM HIS OR HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE AND PERSONALITY?
He loves Lil Wayne
3. INDIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DO WE LEARN "INDIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT HE OR SHE SAYS (DOES)? WHAT DO WE LEARN ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT OTHERS SAY ABOUT HIM OR HER?
He believed Lil Wayne was the best rapper
4. SUGGEST AN ADDED DETAIL TO STRENGTHEN THE DESCRIPTION OF ONE MAJOR OR MINOR CHARACTER.
Strengthen Jermaine
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