Star-Aisha Boyd
Creative Writing
Period #2
A Dance To Victory
He stretches his body leaving every muscle visible to the audience. He slides and
glides across the stage, while making everyone sit at the edge of there seats. He
dances to the music as if the song was made just for him. He seems to dance with
emotion letting his body do all the talking. The song ends and everyone jumps to
there feet applauding his wonderful abilities. James rush off the stage with a smile
on his face. He is so excited. Once he reaches behind the stage, his friends who are
also apart of the Elvin Elle’ dance group, applause him for his great solo.
James felt so high that not even the absents of his mother could bring him down.
Because of his mother’s abused to drugs, James was forced to leave home at the age
of thirteen. During all the hard times he had to face, James found his escape
through dancing. After the show, James rushed over to his mother’s South Philly
row house home, to tell his mother what he have just accomplished. Once he
reached his mother home, James was hesitating. He wasn’t sure if he should go
inside.
He finally gathered the strength to go inside. He slowly opens the door, while yelling
for his mother. She quickly runs to the door wondering who was calling her. When
she finally realized it was he, She started to frown. Ignoring his mother reaction,
James extended his arms to give her a hug. She walks slowly towards him allowing
him to hug her. James was so excited that he didn’t even allow that to bother him.
He begins to tell her what a great night he had and how all the people were
appraising him. She quickly cuts him off and asks for five dollars so she can get a
hit. James was so discussed. He couldn’t believe what his mother just asked him.
James frowned at her and walked out of the house.
On his way home, James received a call from Ms. Kelly Washington. She told him
that when he left some big time producers was asking for him. She also said that
they want him to call then with thin a week. James called the next day and with
thin a month he was future in over fifteen videos, some being: Rihanna, Unfaithful;
Rihanna, SOS; Beyonce, Naughty Girl; and many more. Once he reached a high
level of success, James took one more offered to rescue his mother. He went back to
the South Philly row house. And this time, James was in for a surprise. He opened
the door and his mother was there with her bags packed. She told him that she
checked into a rehabilitation office and the she was going to do right. He then told
her that if she complete all the step and really keep clean, that he would buy her a
house. Since than he James and his mother are doing well and they are both living
in a house located in New York.
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Brandon Carter
EXPOSITION
1. WHEN/WHERE DOES THIS STORY TAKE PLACE?
The story took place in Philadelphia.
2. WHAT HAS HAPPENED BEFORE?
James had to leave his mom because she was abusing drugs.
CONFLICT AND CLIMAX
1. WHAT PROBLEMS DOES THE CENTRAL CHARACTER FACE?
The problem James had to face was his mother’s drug addiction. She asked him for five dollars so she can get some drugs.
2. WHEN DO YOU LEARN HOW THE PROBLEM IS WORKED OUT?
James’s mom went to rehab to get clean.
DENOUEMENT
1. HOW DOES THE STORY END?
James’s mother got clean and he bought her a house in New York.
2. SUGGEST AN EXTRA SCENE TO STRENGTHEN THE PLOT.
Show how James had to leave his crib.
CHARACTERIZATION
1. WHO ARE THE CHARACTERS INVOLVED IN THE STORY?
James and his mother.
HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE THEIR ROLES?
James is someone who faced a lot of life problems at an early age. His mother was a fiend.
2. DIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DOES THE AUTHOR TELL US "DIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST (MAIN CHARACTER) FROM HIS OR HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE AND PERSONALITY?
He had to leave home at an early age, because of his mother’s drug addiction. He also looked at dancing as a way to break free of the stress his mother caused him.
3. INDIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DO WE LEARN "INDIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT HE OR SHE SAYS (DOES)? WHAT DO WE LEARN ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT OTHERS SAY ABOUT HIM OR HER?
I learned that he is a forgiving person. He gives second chances.
4. SUGGEST AN ADDED DETAIL TO STRENGTHEN THE DESCRIPTION OF ONE MAJOR OR MINOR CHARACTER.
His mother should be outside scrambling for change so she can get her drugs. She would seem more like a fiend that way.
Jasmone` Townes
EXPOSiTiON
1. The story takes place in Philadelphia.
2. James left his house and the age of thirteen because his mother was addicted to drugs. He found his escape through dancing.
CONFliCT ANd CliMAX
1. The problem James face is dealing with his mom’s addiction to drugs.
2. I learn how the problem is worked out when he returns to his mother’s house to help her get well when she already enrolled herself in a rehabilitation center.
dENOUEMENT
1. The story ends when James says he is going to buy his mother a house and they both live in New York together.
2. An extra scene to strengthen the plot is how did it mom get into the drug addiction and how hard was it for James to move out at the age of thirteen.
Jasmone` Townes
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CHARACTERiZATiON
1. The character's are James and his mother. The main character is described as a young man that left his house at the age of 13. He left because his mother was addicted to drugs. He found his escape through dancing.
2. The author tells us that he found his escape through dancing when his mom was on drugs. We don't know anything from his physical apperance.
3. I learn that the protagonist is a strong person and will do anything to help his mother get off of drugs. No one says anything about him.
4. They could describe how the mother was so badly addicted to drugs and what else the main character did to help stop the addiction.
Cassandra Thomas
Peer Review Questions
Exposition
1. The story takes place in a dance theater and in South Philly.
2. Before the story James is doing a solo dance and everyone is applauding for him. He is excited and goes to visit his mother at her home.
Conflict and Climax
1. The central character mother is on drugs and he wants to save her.
2. The problem is worked out when James returns back to his mother house after he has been featuring in music videos. He tries to go save his mother once again but she has already checked her self into a rehabilitation. She remains clean and they share a home in New York.
Denouement
1. The story ends with James getting his mother and himself a home in New York
2. An extra scene to strengthen the plot would have been a drastic scene where James mother is actually high on the drug and James sees his mother looking real bad.
Characterization
1. The characters involved in the story are James and his mother.
2. James role is a talented man who loves to dance and releases all his stress through dance. He is a wonderful son to a mother who is on drugs and wants to rescue her from her addition. James mother is a mother who is on drugs but knows that she has to get her self together so she begins rehab.
Direct Characterization
1. The author tells us that the protagonist is muscular and flexible through his dancing. He is determined, caring, and does what is right. The author shows us that because when James shows up at his mother house the first time and she frowns and act as though she barley want to hug him he looks pass it because he wants to help her.
Indirect Characterization
2. I learn that the protagonist is family person, soft hearted, and forgiving. He looked pass his mother drug problem and did not judge but try to help her. When it does not work the first time he tries again and when he sees that his mother is serious he gets them a home together.
Suggest an added detail to strengthen the description of one major or minor character
3. James mother could have had a scene of how she acts when she is high and more dialogue between and her James so readers could get a more detail on her character.
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