I’m so happy were friends again cause with out yall
My life was hard. Not being able to call and say
what’s up or conversate in the halls at schoolman
dat was killing me softly. Oh was up my name Payton
let me tell u some things about me I’m 14 and I’m
in the 9th grade my school is in the Bronx I go to
Christopher Brown high school. One day a few
friends and I was at Shellski Park. Me and the girl Sassshay (we call her
sassy) was arguing because she said that she went
all these wonderful places so I said u always lying
so we began to argue we was about to fight when my
boyfriend Brandon came up and said chill and I left
wit him I told him what happen and he said you need
to cool that out for I get my feelings hurt. After
that I started saying all this stuff about sassy
like how she can’t fight and how they on welfare
and how she is the biggest fraud I know. I know I
should not have said those things to anyone cause
it might get out but I was mad so I said it. The
next day at school everything was fine I was cussing
out as usual and saying hi to every one I know
when I spoke to sassy and she aint say nothing back
so I let it go and said forget her. After school we
was all chilling outside talking then sassy said
Erin , Jordan , Chris , Brandon , Marquise , and
Trevor if they wanted to go to studio 93 so I was
thinking why she aint ask me so I said maybe she
gone ask me later so we keep laughing and she say
so yall going and Trevor says I don’t know if I
want to don’t the cops be out there cause of fights
and stuff and I don’t want to get in no trouble so
they say all u a punk u never do nothing fun so he
say ard I’ll go . We laugh. I say I’m wearing my
cut up jeans my A&F shirt wit my raspberry ice
creams what u wearing sassy I don’t remember
inviting u so I say well I thought u was gone ask
me later why would I do that we aint cool no more
why not u was talking bout me to Jordan I aint say
nothing to Jordan about you well she told me u said
dat i'm poor and im on welfare. You lucky I don’t
beat u up right now but like u cant fight. I can
beat you. That’s the same thing you said in the 3rd grade and I still tore you up in the sandbox
remember. I was little then my hands is crazy now
you should ask about me . That’s when Brandon came
over and said lets go I don’t want this girl to get
beat up .Then Chris was like now u know ya jawn
cant fight she could beat you and so can I .Doubt
it. That’s when we all walked away later on at
studio 93 sassy was dancing with my boyfriend so I
started dancing with Chris and she came over all
loud in my face so just 2pieced her she stood there
probably thinking no this high yellow heffa didn’t
just hit me then she just hit me and we started
fighting. The cops were called and we were taking
to the police station I aint remember nothing she
hit me so hard. So I went t school the next day and
kids are like yo why was yall fighting on youtube .
youtube I said that fight on there . I was sitting
in my 5th period science class when the counselor
called me on the loud speaker on the double. I
said this got to have something to do with the
fight. So I got in there and sassy was in there so the counselor what is the problem. I said sassy is
a fraud and she sweet and I don’t like that about
her and she said she was jealous of Brandon and me
so we did some steps to work out are problems. we
apologized to each other and we friends again now
me, sassy, Brandon, and Chris I’m so I got all my
friends back.
Payton Strawberry
Subscribe to:
Post Comments (Atom)
3 comments:
Exposition
1. The story takes place at studio 93.
Conflict and Climax
1. The problem that the central character face in the story is that how Payton lost her best friend due to jealousy and how Payton said Sassy was lying about going to all these places.
2. I learned the problem was worked out when they were in school and the principal called them into the office to talk about the situation and they dropped the argument and became friends again.
Denouement
1. The story in the office where the two girls solved their problems.
2. I think a good extra scene to strengthen the plot is if Payton gets more serious and tries to bully the girl to where they fight so you can actually see the scene of the story of the fight about to come up.
Characterization
1. Characters in the story are Payton, Sassy, Brandon, Erin, Jordan, Chris, Marquise, Trevor, and the school counselor.
Payton was a girl who just wanted to live her life to the fullest and loves to hand out with her friends. Sassy seems like a girl who is serious and means what comes out of her mouth. Brandon is just a simple boyfriend who tries to keep his girlfriend away from trouble. Erin, Jordan, Chris, Marquise, and Trevor were just friends they hanged with in the story that didn’t really have a part. The school counselor is just like another other school counselor who tries to keep kids out of trouble.
2. The protagonist is how Payton didn’t really like not having her friend around because they were close friends and the fight that took place was just stupid.
3. Payton was willing to work things out to restore their friendship and she’s not going to let a simple little thing take it over.
4. I think Payton should be made into a person who is more hard core with her feelings and express them more to strengthen the character.
Kelly Nguyen
6th period
EXPOSITION
1.Christopher Brown High School
2.Sassy didn't invite Payton to Studio 93
CONFLICT AND CLIMAX
1.Payton wonders why Sassy didn't invite her to go with them
2.When they went into the conselor's room and Payton and Sassy apologizes to each other.
DENOUEMENT
1.Payton, Sassy,Brandon, and Chris were freinds again.
2.You could of explained more about when they were in the conselor's office.
CHARACTERIZATION
1.Payton,Sassy,Brandon,Chris,and the conselor.
2.We learn that the Protagonist is tough and she is the jealous type.
3.We learn from other people that the protagonist is mean,tough, and jealous.
4.You could of strength the role of Chris.
EXPOSITION
1. WHEN/WHERE DOES THIS STORY TAKE PLACE?
In School/Studio 93
CONFLICT AND CLIMAX
1. WHAT PROBLEMS DOES THE CENTRAL CHARACTER FACE?
Her and her best friend get into a fight
2. WHEN DO YOU LEARN HOW THE PROBLEM IS WORKED OUT?
When the counselor called her to the office
DENOUEMENT
1. HOW DOES THE STORY END?
They become friends again
2. SUGGEST AN EXTRA SCENE TO STRENGTHEN THE PLOT.
Your boyfriend getting into an argument with he person who put the fight on youtube
CHARACTERIZATION
1. WHO ARE THE CHARACTERS INVOLVED IN THE STORY? HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE THEIR ROLES?
Payton-Main Character, Sassy-Best Friend & Rival, Brandon-Boyfriend Chris-Best Friends Boyfriend
2. DIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DOES THE AUTHOR TELL US "DIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST (MAIN CHARACTER) FROM HIS OR HER PHYSICAL APPEARANCE AND PERSONALITY?
No Direct Characterization
3. INDIRECT CHARACTERIZATION: WHAT DO WE LEARN "INDIRECTLY" ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT HE OR SHE SAYS (DOES)? WHAT DO WE LEARN ABOUT THE PROTAGONIST FROM WHAT OTHERS SAY ABOUT HIM OR HER?
She’s compassionate and she does not like arguing with her friends
4. SUGGEST AN ADDED DETAIL TO STRENGTHEN THE DESCRIPTION OF ONE MAJOR OR MINOR CHARACTER.
More of the fight
Post a Comment