Growing up in my house was filled with unexpected events .My mother is a very exciting person ,she loves to play games and have parties. One summer evening as nighttime approached my cousins a few friends and I were sitting on the step .We were
bored and thinking about we could do .My mom appeared and suggested we play “HIDE N SEEK” we all agreed. She set the rules, we could hide in the house or around
the front patio. My mom began “apple pickin pumpkin pie whose not ready holler I. I ran upstairs in my mom’s room and remember crawling into her closet and hiding under her long coats. I heard her voice getting softer and softer and I didn’t hear her any more.Well my mom would forget things a lot. Just then the phone rang. Talking for what she said had to be 2 hours, she didn’t even realize I hadn’t appeared yet. All
the other children continued to play also.Around 7:30pm all heck broke loose. My mom started looking for me. She began asking the children were I was, no one had seen me. I was told after only 10 minutes she went ballistic, running up and down the street begging everybody to tell her they'v seen me, they hadn't. That only made her crazier, she ran back home to search the house.Only looking in every room turning on the lights ,within 20minutes the police force was called in. My mom started picking out neighbors whoshe said "was potential childnappers. People said she had all the neighbors searching alleies banging on doors, when one man seemed suspicious to her she demanded he be arrested.The police told her to calm down and rethink the last time she actually seen me.After questioning everybody and my mom retracking her steps.I was found in my mom's closet fast asleep.
Tuesday, October 30, 2007
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