Shana Earley
October 22, 2007
Creative Writing period 2
Am I A Disappointment?
Ring- Ring. I stare at my mother as I call my father at work to tell how my good news, which is his worst nightmare. He finally answers “Hello”, I reply “Hey dad me and mom just left Franklin Mills. I just enrolled in classes at Empire beauty school”. He sits in silence for a few seconds before opening his mouth to kill my high spirit. “Well why does it cost so much, and where do you plan to get the money to pay for this because I can’t get any more loans in my name because…” I listen to him and I don’t say anything. I just hung up the phone as a tear rolled cheek.
My father’s dream is to see his kids graduate from college. Although he didn’t stay in college long, he has higher hopes and expectations for his children. I love my father dearly but I can not fulfill his dream. I plan to attend cosmetology school after I graduate from high school.
Going to college has never been a desire of mine. Not that college is a bad thing, but I just feel that it isn’t for everyone. The first person that I told about cosmetology school was my grandmother. She supports me so much and she is just proud that I am furthering my education in some way. When my dad came to get me from my grandmother’s house she said “Kenny my grand baby wants to practice the art of cosmetology”. My dad looked at her and said “No Shana is going to college to be a lawyer or a doctor. Cosmetology is not art it is a hobby and no one is successful in that.” I said nothing and I didn’t argue with him. I never thought that he would react like that. My dreams were crushed. That was the last time I ever brought it up to him until now. Now that it is almost time for me to persue my dreams I have to talk to him. I need his support.
I need to do what is best for me. I know that my father only wants the best for me but I need to do what makes me happy. Life is too short to try and satisfy everyone. Since I can’t make him happy, and do what it is that he wants me to do he treats me different. We are not as close as we use to be. At this point in my life when I need him the most he refuses to support me. His reaction makes me shelter myself from him, because he makes me feel like I a disappointment.
Success to me does not necessarily mean going to college, but I do applaud anyone who decides to go to college as long that is what you want o do. Never do something for the welfare of someone else if in the end it only makes you unhappy. As for me I will follow my dreams and with much ambition I will succeed.
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Shana,
Your narrative is full of passion and disappointment. It has the tone of something that I’d expect to read in a diary. It is missing sensory detail.
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The opening of your narrative grabs the reader’s attention, draws him or her into the story, and does so in an inventive way. 3
The details that you use throughout your narrative are specific, vivid, and appeal to the senses. 2
The ending effectively wraps up your narrative and has elements of one of the following: surprise, humor, sadness, wonder, anger, frustration, horror, etc. 2
The narrative is representative of the culmination of skills you learned with respect to writing narrative. 2
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