MY FIRST PLANE
This is the craziest time of my life, but it was also the best time of my life. I’m telling you that this was the most excited time that a person could ever experience in they life. Most people say this never happened to them. So you tell me what you think. So go a grab a chair and take a seat.
It all started when I was going to the 6 grade. I had just graduated from the 5 grade. I had graduated in June, but this all happened in July. So it was in the summer time; my parent’s decided to take me and my brother on vacation for our graduation. This was the first time my brother and I graduated in the same year. We never thought that something like this would ever happen.
So we were leaving to go, but my mom and dad hadn’t told us where we were going. When we asked them where we were going, they said, “Ya’ll see when we get there.”
When we arrived my heart dropped immediately. I had never seen anything this big before in my life! There was this big airplane sitting there waiting for us and everybody else to get on it. Then I asked my mom if we were getting on this plane, and she said ‘‘what you mean are we getting on that plane? I know you aren’t scared! ’’
This was my first time ever getting on a plane. I said ‘‘I’m not getting on this plane I don’t care about what ya’ll say.”
Then my brother said ‘‘remember when you was standing in that line to get on that roller coaster and you was so scared, you thought that you was going to throw up’’.
Then I said “yeah why.”
Then he said “once you got up there what happen,”
I said “I was not scared any more because it was not scary once I got on.”
He said “ok you scared now; it’s not gone scary once you get on.”
I said “I will get on the plane, but if it is scary I am never getting on a plane ever again.”
Once I got in the plane, I was still scared. When it took off, I said “what if the plane crash and we all die what I am going do then.”
Once we were in the air way above the clouds, I was not scared any more. I had opened my shade on the plane, and I was looking at all the pretty clouds. The plane was kind of rocking and bouncing up and down. It was so fun.
I said “I was scared to get on an air plane an it was not even scary.”
My brother said “I told you that you were not going to be scared you did all that for nothing.”
When we told my family about what happened they said “you are a loser.”
Then I said “I don’t care ya’ll is different people from me.”
BY: ASMIRA .L. TULL
Tuesday, October 30, 2007
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